Yes! I made it to the outlining day. Now I get to use all the writing I've done this far - which is about 150 pages - and I get to outline my novel. This is it! This is the day to get it down on paper.An outline is a general description or plan for your novel with the essential parts, without all the details. Outlining is a great way to see if your novel has enough juice to fill the chalice. Or wine, in my case...ha.
I've learned a lot from this book so far, and I am excited to show you what my outline is starting to look like. I've used my research I did on my characters, my synopsis of the entire novel, and the ideas floating around my head.
Below is my Outline:
Day 20 & 21: Outline: Signpost
INT: Scene
1: Contemplative/Interior
Setting: Alaska: Uncle Alakshak’s round
hut
Characters: Seit, Uncle, camp kids
Purpose: to show tension between Seit
and her new surroundings & Uncle
Plot: Seit rides in the front of an old
pick up truck. What does she look like? She is wearing an old Sah pg. 45
(amulet of protection: The eye of Horus pg. 49) but she does not know it’s what
it is. She’s always had it. On her way to the Camp =
long drive, pot holes, animals, gets poorer and poorer looking, less people,
more trees, then no lights on the roadway, dirt roads, through muddy spots,
gets stuck next to a dump= the whole time Uncle talks about being and Indian
and what it means / while Seit thinks inward about everything, the funeral, the
packing of her stuff and leaving it in storage, what she was allowed to bring,
how this place smells…differences / wants to go home / Uncle blocks her
/ why does her bloodline matter? How can it help with
the Egyptian side?
She unpacks
what little she was allowed by Uncle to bring with her from Oregon, after her
parents died. He rocks in a rocking chair on his porch. The door is open. Camp
kids peak in to see her. She’s done quickly, and sits down on bed, but Uncle
calls her out. She’s exhausted, just wants to sleep, but he has tails of
Indians he must share. Camp kids gawk at her clothes, make-up, and ask odd
questions. She feels like a complete outsider.
Related to next scene? In this scene
she feels like an outsider, but no one’s actually said that to her – next scene
bullies try to scare her and say she’s not wanted at camp.
At stake? Seit becoming a loner –
feeling depressed – lost
Conflict? Uncle wants her to follow the
path he’s chosen for her / Seit wants to be left alone to choose her own path
Further develops plot how? Who is Seit?
Who is she related to? Gets the ball rolling on those questions.
EX:
Scene 2: Action Scene
Setting: firepit – in the middle of
camp
Characters: Camp Kid bullies & Seit
Purpose: to complicate the plot with
new enemies
Plot: Uncle sends Seit for salmon –
it’s been hung over the fire pit in the middle of camp. She goes willingly,
happy for the escape of him and his stories. But soon a group of older camp
kids surround her. They threaten her. They don’t want her here. They know she
doesn’t want to be here too. Up the attack = more
serious She drops the fish – it’s covered in ash and dirt. One of them
shoves her. She runs.
Related to scene before/after? Relates
to 1 by showing how she does not belong here, relates to 3 more bad news – the
medicine woman thinks she’s cursed – gives her a warning to leave
At stake? Bodily harm / dignity
Conflict? Bully who wants to be the
chief and Seit, who he thinks wants the job too
Further the plot? Making it harder for
Seit to stay / get her to go with Uncle so he will let her go to a real school
and tell everyone she will not be the chief
Scene 2.5: Contemplative/Interior/Action
Setting: Alaska’s smallest town near
camp / Mr.Gayle’s house
Characters: Seit, Mr.Gayle, Mindy, Lex
Purpose: to show Seit’s want of her old
life / old ways & to meet new characters and show how good she is at art =
she could have been great
Plot: Added
scene = wants to go to a real art teacher, finds Mr. Gayle online, but he only
teaches at school / or is he a private art teacher and Mindy and Lex are his
other students? She is so good she blows them away = jealousy but ends up in
friendships. Seit snoops / sees paintings of odd Egyptian symbols and Totem poles
together. Strange…Mr. Gayle refuses to teach her since she’s from the camp = no
point / she’ll not come back = but then she proves her talent and he takes her
on if she promises to show up on time and try.
Related to 2/3? Show her contrast with
feeling lost and knowing she’s good at something / meet new characters who
might be on her side / 3= proves the medicine women has some talents
At stake? Her hobby / making friends if
she’s too good / losing the last bit of herself
Conflict? Seit vs. Mr. Gayle / Seit vs.
Mindy & Lex
Further the plot? She meets her new
friends / she gets something out of it so she can bare what is happening in the
other aspects of her life / gives a glimpse into Mr. Gayle = he knows more and
is more than just an art teacher
INT: Scene
3: Dialogue
Setting: Loner Hut – far from the
others
Characters: Anpaytoo & Seit &
Uncle
Purpose: to get Seit to think about her
past – to unsettle her more
Plot: Uncle makes Seit go see the
medicine woman of the camp. Anpaytoo is in her 80’s and ½ Indian. Seit thinks
she has Alzheimer’s, but her crazy Uncle believes she interprets dreams. Anpaytoo
talks about art & the classes she signed up for = will keep Seit’s secret
if she promises to try to see. Uncle explains to Anpaytoo all that’s happened to
Seit up until now, then he leaves. He seems to have no heart. Seit wants to go,
but she does not want to be rude. She stays and listens – not believing one
word about her past and link to Indians. medicine women more
creepy = make her more demanding or see more for Seit to get Seit interested
and conflicted
Related to 2/4? 2= more wanna be
Indians telling her bad news / 4= agreeing to go to totem graveyard to not be a
part of this nutty clan
At stake? Seit misses out on some
important information about her bloodline by not listening
Conflict? Seit vs. herself / she does
not want to believe any of this
Further the plot? Sets up the idea that
there is more to Seit than meets the eye, even more to Seit that Uncle knows.
INT: Scene
4: Contemplative/Interior
Setting: Path toward Totem Graveyard
Characters: Uncle & Seit
Purpose: to grow tension between them
Plot: Uncle walks in front of her
barefoot and silent. She can’t believe she agreed to do this – to go to this
stupid totem pole graveyard with him to meet her spirit guide. But he did
promise to leave her be if she didn’t see anything. She thinks about what she’d
be doing right now if her parent’s seaplane didn’t crash. She thinks about her
home, her things she had to leave behind. She thinks about the camp, no
electricity, no laptop, no phone – the town, no mall, no real stores – just one
store that sells everything from twists to horse feed to high heels. She longs
for normalcy.
Related to 3/5? 3 =The reason she’s
doing this is to get him to leave her alone about dreams / Indians / chiefdom.
5= heading toward totem graveyard, she’s getting more internal and more angry
At stake? Relationship between Uncle
and Seit
Conflict? Seit vs. Self in that she
does not believe any of this & Seit vs. Uncle in that she will show him how
pig headed she can be
Further the plot? Getting deeper into
who she really is – more mysterious
EX:
Scene 5: Action Scene
Setting: Totem Pole Graveyard
Characters: Seit, Uncle, Bear
Purpose: to freak Seit out – to make
her want to run away – to meet spirit guide
Plot: Uncle makes Seit smoke from his
pipe and then he disappears, leaving her barefoot, and freezing in the middle
of a fogged in totem graveyard. She calls for him again and again, but he never
answers. So she warns that she will damage the totem pole. He still doesn’t
answer. So she caves her initials into the wood. The tip of her pocket knife
hits something metal – it’s a gold coin with strange pictures carved into it.
She keeps it to sell it for a new laptop and to get electricity to the camp.
Then a bear swipes claws at her. She runs – Uncle locked her inside the fence,
and she knocks herself out trying to scale the fence. ** The Link is a
golden figurine of Egyptian descent but looking a lot like the Indian totem
pole carvings on the middle totem, and a lot like the necklace she had as a
baby (find it in her old house) dreams of her art school & friends, going
back or being able to take classes again / knowing about her debut in NY is now
given to an old rival in Cali = more hate toward Uncle and this obsession with
his Indian blood
Related to 4/6? 4= her anger and
anxiety about doing this lead her to cut the totem / 6= her spirit guide shows
up after she’s smoked in this scene
At stake? Relationship with Uncle /
self-control / damaging the totem
Conflict? Seit vs. Uncle = take her
anger out on his favorite totem
Further the plot? More mysterious /
Peaks Seit’s interest / gets her to run away / research the link and her
bloodline
EX:
Scene 6: Dialogue/Action
Setting: Totem Pole Graveyard
Characters: Seit & Bear
Purpose: Establish the link between her
and her bear
Plot: Seit wakes up who knows how long
later. The bear is still there, but just sits staring at her. It has her gold
coin in its mouth. She yells at it – it does not move. She stands. It stands
and starts to mosey away. Seit wants that coin. She wants a plane ticket out of
here and a new laptop. She follows. The bear takes her to another door – a
wooden door – where it pounds on it until it opens. Then it tosses the coin
out. Seit runs out too and slams the door shut. The bear does not try to follow
her. Seit runs home – ready to fight with Uncle.
Related to 5/7? 5= she is still in the
graveyard with the bear / 7= fights with Uncle about the bear
At stake? Her beliefs / losing the coin
that will get her something she wants
Conflict? Seit vs. Self = does she
believe this is here spirit guide or just some random bear & Seit vs. Bear
= to get the coin back
Further the plot? Deepens the belief in
spirit guides and that Seit is a part of the old blood
EX:/INT: Scene 7: Dialogue
Setting: Camp
Characters: Seit, Uncle, and random
campers
Purpose: to show Seit’s feisty – and
Uncles wisdom
Plot: Seit enters the camp angry as
ever. Sees Uncle cooking with the group of campers. She marches to him, fuming.
She screams he locked her inside with a man-eating bear. The campers hush.
Uncle claps – very proud. Seit is more infuriated. She tells him and them what
she really thinks about their wanna be Indian crap. She storms off to her hut
to pack. She’ll run away in the night – go back home somehow and never be seen
again. up this fight – does she get violent? Does she
say unthinkable things? Does she hurt the whole camp wanna be group? /
uncle smiles and is happy she met her guide / make him
more wise than she is able to see = what could he say at this moment of great
despair that readers would get but the MC will not?
Related to 6/8? 6= bear creates a fight
between her and Uncle / 8= runs away due to the fight and not fitting in and
not wanting to believe
At stake? Relationship between Seit and
Uncle / offending campers
Conflict? Seit vs. Uncle
Further the plot? Creates deeper
tension propelling her away from who she is and her only family member left
INT:/EX: Scene 8: Action
Setting: Seaplane Airport
Characters: Seit and Pilot
Purpose: to show she can get over a
fear / but makes questionable choices
Plot: Seit makes it to the seaplane
airport – the one her parents used all the time. She begs the pilot to take her
home – she plays on his sadness about her parents. He agrees. They fly for
hours in a storm – a bad one. Then they land and she asks him for some money
for a cab. He gives in. She goes to her old house – but does not know the
realtor already sold it. Uncle never told her – probably used the money for
firewood. She’s angry. Does her spirit guide show her
how her parents died? Was it the ESS?
Related to 7/9? 6=the fight propelled
her to this point / 9=shows that she doesn’t belong to her old world now either
At stake? Lying to the pilot / getting
hurt / getting lost
Conflict? Seit vs. Seaplane = can she
get on one after her parents died in one
Further the plot? Shows she is brave /
will help get her over wanting to go home
INT: Scene
9: Dialogue/Action
Setting: Her old home in Oregon
Characters: Seit & New Owner
Purpose: to show her she can’t go
backwards – only forwards
Plot: Seit finds the key she hid, opens
the door and sneaks into her old kitchen, up the stairs and into her bedroom.
The house is different. The smells are different. All her pictures are gone –
but she finds hidden drawings and cards from her parents in her wall of her
bedroom. She’s so overcome with emotion – she doesn’t hear the new homeowner.
He comes at her with a bat. He chases her out. She is able to keep one card.
She runs away to her favorite café.
She finds her old hidden box of young collections = her
bracelet with the same Link symbol / drops the rest of her prizes but gets the
bracelet out
Related to 8/10? 8=build up in her mind
about going home is a let down / 10=creeped out in the café even though it used
to be her place / email scares her too
At stake?
Her memories / longing to be home again
Conflict? Seit vs. Self = she wants to
go back, but can’t & Seit vs. Owner = she is kicked off her home
Further the plot? Get her back to camp
/ to make her research who she is
INT: Scene
10: Contemplative/Dialogue
Setting: Oregon Cafe
Characters: Seit, waiter & ESS girl
Purpose: to creep Seit out – make her
want to call Uncle
Plot: The café feels warm and smells
familiar. Seit takes her usual seat on the couch next to a girl with odd
tattoos. They smile a hello. Seit pulls out the card – it has drawings of hers
from when she was little and a note from her mother and father. The tattooed
girl seems overly interested. The waiter comes to talk with Seit – asks about
Alaska and how it’s going. Seit asks to borrow his laptop. He gets her drink
and computer. She has an email from someone in Egypt about the coin. How did
they know about it? Weird. The tattooed girl attempts more conversation –
noticing the coin email. Seit starts to feel paranoid. She goes to the phone
and dials the seaplane place in Alaska – tells him to get a message to Uncle –
to come get her. New girl is the waitress and old
waiter was fired, per her / she allows Seit to use her computer = creepy stuff
about the LINK in an email / new girl gets passwords and email account from her
using it
Related to 9/11? 9=home doesn’t feel
like home anymore it’s more dangerous / 11=prompted by the weirdness of the
girl, the bear, and going home she starts searching for the coin
At stake? Losing her coin / giving too
much away / getting hurt
Conflict? Seit vs. Self = should she go
back to camp / Seit vs. Tattooed girl = why is she so in her business
Further the plot? More mystery
surrounds the coin / odd girl / weird email from Egypt
EX:
Scene 11: Dialogue
Setting: School
Characters: Seit, Mindy, Lex
Purpose: to find out more about the
coin
Plot: Seit confides in Mindy & Lex
after they grill her about running away. She shows them the coin – and they do
some digging on the computer. Their interest sends more alerts to the ESS. Seit
tells them about the weird tattooed girl and how she felt like she wanted
information. Could the coin be something serious? How much can it be worth?
They discover a small note about the ESS and their beliefs in the 5 coins – 4
have been reclaimed. 1 remains. Could it be her coin? They discuss bloodlines
too – why her Uncle is so obsessed with Indians. Comic relief. This makes Seit
more curious to her bloodline. She receives more emails from mystery person in
Egypt.
Every site she’s directed to shows tons of these statues =
bogus sites & her friends find out some interesting info at the local
library + Mr. Gayle has some odd old papers in his locked drawer / also more
odd paintings with symbols / Seit feels drawn to them
Related to 10/12? 10=tattooed girl gets
Seit more interested in the coin / 12=Seit is in school with Mindy & Lex
At stake? Mindy & Lex thinking
she’s nuts / her coin
Conflict? Seit vs. Self = should she
trust them? Who is she?
Further the plot? More information
about the coin / gets Seit some helpers
EX:
Scene 12: Dialogue/Action
Setting: School/Art Room
Characters: Seit, Mr. Gayle, Mindy,
Lex, Class
Purpose: to add more mystery to Seit’s
bloodline link
Plot: The assignment is to copy
Egyptian symbols – they are studying Egypt and making art projects with that in
mind. Seit finishes first – she never finishes first – her artwork is never
great – it’s so-so. One kid warns her that she’ll tell that’s she’s not
supposed to be here. Mr. Gayle shows concern and has Seit stay after. Mindy and
Lex go on ahead to lunch. Mr. Gayle asks Seit to close her eyes and he says the
name of an Egyptian symbol – she draws it perfectly – she doesn’t know how
she’s doing it. Then the fire alarm is pulled – and everyone exits the school.
wants to fly under the radar to not let Uncle know she’s been paying for private art lessons with
“camp” funds / which is really her money
Related to 11/13? 11=meet Mindy &
Lex / 13=she feels like she’s something special, maybe could belong here then
the bullies take that away from her
At stake? Being weird / being hated by
other kids / getting too much attention / getting told on
Conflict? Seit vs. tattle-tale = might
get kicked out of school / Seit vs. self = how is she doing it?
Further the plot? Makes Seit more
interesting/ maybe she is special
INT: Scene
13: Dialogue
Setting: Camp
Characters: wanna be Indian gang, Seit,
Uncle
Purpose: to push Seit away from here /
up the tension
Plot: The bullies corner Seit when she
comes home from school. They threaten to tell on her – to get her kicked out.
She must tell Uncle she will not be the next chief. She must denounce her blood
link. They push her. But this time she pushes back. She gets hit – and her
mouth bleeds. She runs. Hiding it from Uncle. And they get into another fight.
burn her art books? The only things left of her Mom &
Dad? Burn her pictures?
Related to 12/14? 12=she’s finally
feeling like she might belong here then they take that away again / 14=she’s
questioning herself again when her spirit guide shows up to prove to her that
something is odd about the coin
At stake? Body harm / feelings
Conflict? Seit vs. Bully = physical
fight / Seit vs. Self = negative thinking that she does not belong
Further the plot? Does not let her get
comfortable
EX:
Scene 14: Interior
Setting: Camp - hut
Characters: Seit, Bear
Purpose: to guide her toward her
destiny
Plot: Seit is ready for sleep. She
keeps the coin on her at all times – paranoid that someone will try to take it,
especially after the continuous emails from someone in Egypt. Her mind is going
over everything – the events and the bear appears at the window. Seit jumps –
but does not wake Uncle. She creeps to the door and goes outside. The bear
pounds the earth – in a threatening way, but Seit does not know why. He growls.
She backs up. He starts to walk off, and when she doesn’t follow, he pounds the
ground again. She gets it and follows – they go all the way back to the totem
graveyard. He paws at the lock – Seit’s not sure what to do – she doesn’t have
a key. He growls again. She looks closer at the lock – it’s got a symbol on it.
One that matches the coin – the woman with wings. Then he disappears. Seit
hurries back to the hut.
Related to 13/15? 13=she is questioning
herself again but her spirit guide makes her see beyond the bully / 15=
At stake? Dying out in the woods
following a crazy bear / her sanity / getting caught by the bullies
Conflict? Seit vs. Self = does she
believe in this stuff. Will she?
Further the plot? Shows more of a link
the link has to the totem graveyard / like it was made for it?
INT:/EX: Scene 15: Action
Setting: School
Characters: Seit, Mindy, Lex, Cleaning
Person
Purpose: to force them out of Alaska /
thicken the plot
Plot: Seit, Mindy, and Lex come up with
a plan to steal money from the art fund to buy their tickets to Egypt. The
money sits in a huge glass donation jar at school in the middle of the
lunchroom. They will break in after hours, and steal it. They dress in black –
Seit darkens her face and covers her blond hair. Mindy braids hers, and wears
long black gloves. Lex is in a track suit and ski cap. They break in – cleaning
person hears something – almost busts them – they crack the glass – coins go
everywhere – they grab the cash – stuff it into pockets – keep going until the cleaning
person runs at them with a mop – pulls the fire alarm. She gets them caught for stealing from Mr. Gayle = major disappointment and no show
in town for her art and then money shows up from Egypt) wants to go to
Egypt, to meet with whoever has been emailing her, wants to steal money for
plane tickets / busted by cleaning person? Yolanda?
Does she stop her? Call the cops?
Related to 14/16? 14=pushes her to go
to Egypt to find out more / 16=fight with Uncle
At stake? Trust by Uncle and camp /
friends by getting them caught / school time if they get caught / Trust by Mr.
Gayle
Conflict?
Seit vs. Mr. Gayle = his art supply money / Seit vs. Uncle = his
money / Seit vs. Self = is this the right thing?
Further the plot? She in too deep to
turn around / steeling money = get tickets and go
INT: Scene
16: Dialogue
Setting: Camp
Characters: Seit, Uncle
Purpose: To escalate tension between
them
Plot: Uncle Alaska sits Seit down to
seriously talk about the tribe. She laughs. It’s not tribe, it’s a bunch of
wanna bes going no where. Uncle is hurt. He lays into her about responsibility
and family. She screams back that her parents are dead because of him and his
stupid camp. They were bringing him supplies. They felt bad for him, keeping
him as a pet, like a puppy. Where’s all the money for her house? Why can’t he
make this place nicer? Who would want to live like this? People aren’t going to
go backwards. He can’t stop computers and cell phones with forty-five losers.
He dismisses her. She doubles back – spying on him, hoping he’ll go for the
money and he does. She waits until he leaves, and steals it – buys her Egypt
tickets – booked for the next day. Mr. Gayle so
disappointed & so hurt = no art show for Seit / he had 100 people coming
and tickets being sold for raffle of her painting / it was a surprise
Related to 15/17? 15=steal money from
Uncle then fight with him about everything she hates to make it all right in
her mind that she stole / 17=Uncle trying to keep her at camp as she runs away
again
At stake? Relationship with Uncle /
herself
Conflict? Seit vs. Uncle = fights with
him / Seit vs. Self = she is becoming mean to cover up stealing
Further the plot? She must go because
the money / she needs to go to not get caught
EX:
Scene 17: Action
Setting: Airport (is there one in Alaska? Maybe stick to
seaplane)
Characters: Seit, Mindy, Lex, Uncle,
ESS airport guard
Purpose: kill Uncle and make Seit feel
guilty
Plot: Seit borrows Mr. Gayles car –
gets Mindy and Lex at the town laundry mat. They hightail it to the airport.
Uncle finds his money missing and sees Seit’s clothes gone. He calls the
Seaplane, but the pilot denies helping Seit. He heads to the airport on a
hunch. He sees them in the long hallway – right before security. He runs toward
them, yelling for Seit. She sees him and pushes ahead of a group. A security
guard tackles Uncle. Seit feels relieved, but then Uncle struggles with him as
she passes security. She can’t go back to help or explain. The plane is getting
ready to take off – she is pushed forward, but as the door closes – a gun goes
off. Uncle falls. She tries to get off the plane, but they won’t allow her. The
whole plane is ESS. Uncle is grabbed by a security
guard / taken away in handcuffs / captured by the ESS / hit hard once in front
of Seit = he goes down
Related to 16/18? 16=fight with Uncle
but now he tries to save her / 18=Uncle gets hurt because of her / killed
At stake? Uncle’s life
Conflict? Seit vs. Uncle = he chases
after her / Seit vs. Plane = won’t let her off to help him
Further the plot? More mysterious / who
is the guard? Is uncle all right? Who is on the plane with them?
INT: Scene
18: Dialogue/Interior
Setting: Aboard the Plane to Egypt
Characters: Seit, Mindy, Lex &
Flight Attendant & Bear
Purpose: heighten suspense
Plot: Seit is frantic. She pleads with
the flight attendants, but they will not re-open the doors. flight attendants
will not allow her = overly odd / overly kind like to a
baby / give her something to calm her nerves and she goes out = sees her spirit
guide and this time listens & learns
The flight
takes off and she is crying – screaming to get off. Finally the attendant gives
her something to calm her down & she’s knocked out. While sleeping, she
meets her spirit guide. He is agitated. He shakes his head, and paces. He draws
a symbol in the dirt, then scratches it out. He does this over and over until
Seit wakes. They are landing – and there are flashing lights and what look like
cops cars all over the runway.
Related to 17/19? 17=Uncle just got
hurt / 18=cops are there for her
At stake? Uncle’s health / Seit wanting
to be in Egypt / her life / her friends
Conflict? Seit vs. Flight Attendants =
won’t let her off the plane / Seit vs. Self = wondering what she has done
Further the plot? Who are the cops?
What happened to Seit’s Uncle? Everything becomes more serious. And everyone on
the plane has the tattoo of the link.
EX:
Scene 19: Action
Setting: Air Strip Egypt
Characters: Seit, Mindy, Lex & ESS
guards
Purpose: heighten suspense / tension
Plot: The plane lands. But they keep
the passengers on – then four ESS agents come on board and escort Seit, Mindy,
and Lex off. They won’t explain why – Seit tries to get some information – but
they bully her to the cars. Then the anti-ESS group tries to intercept them –
grabs Lex – but misses Seit and Mindy. The ESS SUV’s take off while Seit and
Mindy are blindfolded and tied down.
Related to 18/20? 18=the end of the
flight / 20=ESS agents are reprimanded so Seit feels her “brother” cares.
At stake? Being kidnapped / the link
being discovered / Lex being lost
Conflict? Seit vs. ESS agents
Further the plot? Who has Lex? Who are
the ESS agents and why are they being so rough with them? What’s going to
happen?
EX:/INT: Scene 20: Internal/Dialogue
Setting: Brother’s Palace
Characters: Seit, Mindy, Brother,
dancers and dinner goers
Purpose: to confuse Seit / brother
relationship
Plot: Brother acts very upset that Seit
and Mindy were tied and blinded. He orders them released immediately and washed
up and dressed in full royal garb. They are treated like two princesses – then
a royal dinner is put on with strange, exotic foods – some scary, some
wonderful and colorful. There is dancing and brother talks with Seit – flirting
with Mindy – and putting on his best show. Seit shows him the link. He says she
should keep it safe. Where is Lex? Who took him? Brother and others lie…
Related to 19/21? 19=ESS agents, but
now they are reprimanded / 21=Seit is wrestling with trust with her new brother
At stake? Losing Lex / Giving up the
Link / Seit making the wrong choice
Conflict? Seit vs. Brother = is he
telling the truth? / Seit vs. ESS agents = as they are reprimanded she gets the
suspicion that they thought they were doing as they were told
Further the plot? New family connection
/ more understanding of the Link and her bloodline
EX:
Scene 21: Interior/contemplative
Setting: Bedroom in Palace – Seit’s
Characters: Seit, Mindy – guard outside
door
Purpose: tension between Mindy and Seit
Plot: Seit and Mindy argue over going
after Lex. Seit is trying to believe her new found family member – Mindy does
not trust them. Mindy leaves to her room – Why are there guards? If brother is
so trustworthy – why the guards? She was allowed to keep the coin, maybe the
guards are so no one comes in to steal it. She makes excuses for brother. She
wants to believe him – but she is unsure. brother
overly nice and showing Lex as a bad kid = showing her fake arrest sheet and
him wanting the money from her LINK
Related to 20/22? 20=trusting brother
good? / 22=brother promises to bring back parents / Uncle is dead
At stake? Friendship with Mindy / their
lives / losing Seit’s last blood link
Conflict? Seit vs. Mindy = to believe
or not believe her brother and find Lex
Further the plot? Deepen the plot /
whose side should Seit choose?
INT: Scene
22: Dialogue
Setting: interior great pyramid
Characters: Seit, brother, guards
Purpose: to lure Seit in more / up
tension between Seit and Mindy
Plot: Brother has Mindy detained and
shows Seit her parent’s bodies and uncle’s body wrapped in cloth. He promises
that she can bring them back – once she places the coin in the last slot – and
joins her blood with his. Seit is crying – wants to see her parents again,
feels so guilty about Uncle – she agrees – and the ceremony will start tomorrow
– during a dark moon
Related to 21/23? 21=trust issues with
brother / 23=show that brother is untrustworthy
At stake? Seit’s parents and uncle /
magic of Egypt
Conflict? Seit vs. Self = grief over
Uncle and parent’s death / doing the right thing / helping her new brother and
Egypt
Further the plot? Stacking the deck so
Seit will choose to give her blood freely and the Link
EX:
Scene 23: Action
Setting: Anti-ESS headquarters
Characters: Lex & top agents
Purpose: The plan to rescue Seit &
Mindy – to destroy the ESS and recover the 5 coins
Plot: Lex stands over underground plans
of the middle great pyramid. He is giving the plan to rescue Seit and Mindy –
he is nervous – but sounds brave. He is dressed in Egyptian garb with two
swords criss-crossed on his back. He has tattoos on his arms and legs. They
load weapons and food on to camels – and ride out into the dark, cold night –
no moon.
Related to 22/24? 22=Anti-ESS proves
Brother is not trustworthy to Lex / 24=brother wounds Mindy / turns on Seit /
not trustworthy
At stake? Losing Seit / Lex losing his
life
Conflict? Lex vs. Brother = knowing
what he’s capable of
Further the plot? Not sure? Maybe not a
good chapter or might have to add more POV’s because this is the only one from
Lex’s
INT:/EX: Scene 24: Dialogue / Action
Setting: interior great pyramid
Characters: Brother, Seit, Mindy –
guards – dead parents & Uncle
Purpose: heighten tension Seit/Brother
Plot: Seit kneels at the alter. Brother
holds knife ready – Seit places the Link into the slot. Brother cuts his palm
then Seit’s. Their blood runs down the small pyramid – running over each
symbol, coming together at the top point in a pool. The real pyramid rumbles
and shakes. Statues come alive – and so does Seit’s parents and uncle. They rip
their cloths off – but their eyes are dead – they are zombie-like – no soul.
Seit screams – Brother has her shackled – Mindy runs toward them – brother
throws his knife – hitting her in the chest. She goes down. Brother throws them
both into underground jail.
Related to 23/25? 23=Shows that Lex’s
rescue mission is too late, Seit already gave her blood freely / 25=Mindy dies
from her wound
At stake? Trusting brother / going too
far / Mindy / Seit’s own well being
Conflict? Seit vs. Mindy = Mindy tries
to stop her / Seit vs. Brother = Brother wounds Mindy
Further the plot? Gives the bad guy
what he wanted / Seit loses anther person she’s grown close to / everyone she
loves dies
EX:
Scene 25: Dialogue / Action
Setting: Jail Cell
Characters: Seit, Mindy, Guard
Purpose: more distress on Seit – show
her cunning
Plot: Seit and Mindy are placed in
separate cells. Mindy is unconscious and still bleeding. Guard is around
Seit’s age – and kind of dumb. Seit gets him to allow her to see Mindy – give
her time with her to find out how they were brought into the cell – Seit was
knocked out by brother – but Mindy was awake – bleeding, but lucid. Seit even
gets the guard to give her some water. Mindy wakes, but is going to die. Seit
can tell because of a rabbit she once had as a pet, when it died in her arms.
Mindy tells Seit what she remembers and then gives her a hidden gift – her
knife. Mindy dies. Seit gets angry – she will fight. This is the fourth person
to die because of her blood link. The guard readies to let her out, when she
attacks – stabbing him, and then takes off.
Mindy lives, but hobbles on Seit’s arm = she falls and as the ESS
guards grab them, Seit is snatched and tossed onto a camel = leaving Mindy
behind and a battle with Anti-ESS guards
Related to 24/26? 24=Brother wounds
Mindy / 26=Seit broke out of prison, using Mindy to fool the guard
At stake? Losing another friend / being
caught or turned into a zombie herself / or going along with brother and losing
herself
Conflict? Seit vs. Guard = getting him
to let her see Mindy / Seit vs. Self = letting Mindy go and escaping
Further the plot? Shows how evil her
“brother” is and that she must act against him or everyone will end up like her
parents, uncle, and now Mindy
INT:/EX: Scene 26: Action
Setting: Tunnels of Great Pyramid
Characters: Seit, Chasing Guards,
Anti-Ess character
Purpose: suspense
Plot: Seit is running down a long hallway covered in symbols – some
Egyptian, some Indian – she sees the long green snake Mindy remembered, she
knows she’s on the right path – she can hear the ESS guards echoing behind her
– then wham – she is hit hard by a huge arm. Anti-ESS character has her in a bear
hug – flashback to the bear and she knows to trust this guy – he runs with her
– then scoops her up onto a camel – they gallop side by side – the ESS guards
fire – Seit’s camel keeps running – there’s a group of camels on the ridge
ahead – they return fire – Seit and Character are in the middle – dodging
bullets – once the reach the group they all gallop away – miles go by and no
one speaks or explains – they gallop toward a huge sand storm – and Seit thinks
they will die – but the sand does not sting – and soon they are in the middle
of a great palace.
Related to 25/27? 25=Seit used Mindy to
escape and now is on the run / 27=Seit is in a new palace, still feeling out of
touch, but she is treated with respect and authority here
At stake? Being caught / and being led
into another psycho group that is on another side she does not know about
Conflict? Seit vs. Guards = chasing her
and shooting / Seit vs. Anti-ESS guard = throws her on a camel
Further the plot? Now she has a chance
to concur her brother and take back what is rightfully her bloodline / but does
she want that? Does she believe in herself yet and who she is?
INT: Scene
27: Dialogue
Setting: Great Palace
Characters: Seit, Anti-ESS head characters
Purpose: Explanations
Plot: Seit is brought into a room with
a triangular table and men and women sitting, drinking, eating and talking.
They hush when she enters – one even bows her way. Seit feels very odd – out
numbered and scared. They start to explain who they are – who she is – and what
they must do next to stop her brother. They show her the war plans – tell her
how many soldiers they have ready to fight for her – and overwhelm her with
decisions to make. Then they escort her to her room – the Queen suite – with
jewels, gowns – and amazing views – servants, and flowers, perfumes and a pet
monkey. People giggle and point as she walks by – she is so blond compared to
everyone here. Children touch her hair – and are shooed away.
Seit wants to be
told what to do / wants to be in art class again and be
a kid with parents to look over her/ they put her in charge
Related to 26/28? 26=Escape with
another group / 28=Seeing Lex helps her to feel some connection here / he is
dressed and ready for war and accepts this fate / now she has to
At stake? Her old self / losing herself
/ still not fitting in / making the wrong decisions / getting others killed on
her behalf
Conflict? Seit vs. Self = does she want
this? Can she send people to their deaths? Is she strong enough?
Further the plot? Plans for war /
molding her into the Queen she is
Scene 27.5: Action / Dialogue
Setting: Egyptian Palace / small hut
that no one goes to
Characters: Seit & Egyptian Seer
& Lex
Purpose: to give Seit courage / for her
to see her mixture as a good thing not as what her brother said = weak thing
Plot: Added
Scene = Egyptian Seer shows her how her Indian blood has enhanced her Egyptian
blood / she can see things / she can do things / she is stronger because of the
mix
Related to 27/28? She is finding out
more and more about who she came from and where she is going / 28=feeling odd
again, like an outsider but trying to believe
At stake? Being ruled by the Egyptian
witch
Conflict? Seit vs. Lex = he does not
want her to go / Seit vs. Witch = will she trust her enough
Further the plot? More understanding of
who Seit is and how the two bloodlines have mixed to make her stronger
INT:/EX: Scene 28: Internal / Dialogue
Setting: Queen Suite – Seit’s Suite
Characters: Seit, Servants & Lex
Purpose: slow the pace / evolve Lex
& Seit’s relationship
Plot: Seit is stripped – and bathed by
servants. She feels self-conscience and weird about this. At first she tries to
do it all herself – but they insist on helping. She is thinking about Lex and
asking to see him. Speak of the Devil, he comes in. The servant girls try to
shoo him out, but he comes right in. Seit is naked in the huge stone water
basin and yells at him to shut his eyes. She gets out and is wrapped in a huge
purple silk cloth to dry. She dresses in a white gown and then the servants
leave them alone. Lex asks about Mindy – as he sees her bloody clothes. She
breaks down and tells him everything. She does not want him to die on her
behalf too. She forbids him to fight the next day – they argue and he leaves
angry and says she is not his Queen and he does not have to listen to her –
says she’s getting a big head. He storms out – leaving her broken – unsure of
herself and not wanting to go to sleep.
not trusting Lex totally = ask about his past / he gets angry
Related to 27/29? 27=Seit not knowing
what to do/ feeling out numbered and out of place / 29=Seit dressed for war /
confident, but still wanting peace
At stake? Friendship with Lex /
herself, who is she? / Being unsure
Conflict? Seit vs. Self = Is she the
Queen / Seit vs. Lex = not wanting him harmed
Further the plot? Showing her more
confident / clothes can help / Wanting to protect Lex, and maybe a flowering
romance?
INT: Scene
29: Action
Setting: Great Palace Gates
Characters: Seit, Anti-ESS head
characters, Lex
Purpose: up tension / ready for battle
Plot: Seit is dressed in war garb –
given her small knife back along with two swords like Lex. She is put on top of
the largest camel – dressed in gold and purple – Lex sits next to her – some
random girl flirts with him – making Seit irritated – Lex laughs – the head
AESS character gives a speech – Seit must say something – she turns red – then
gets serious – everyone cheers and follows her into battle formation. They ride
out of the sand storm, toward the Great Pyramids.
Related to 28/30? 28=Lex and her fight,
but she gains more confidence from him and her clothes / 30=Lex wants to
protect her now / brother seems to want peace too
At stake? Her life / Lex’s life / her
people’s lives / not helping her parents, uncle and Mindy
Conflict? Seit vs. Self = can she do
this? Can she start a war? / Seit vs. Les = he wants to protect her
Further the plot? War is going to
happen / shows confidence in Seit
EX:
Scene 30: Dialogue
Setting: Battle Ground / Brother’s Tent
Characters: Seit, AESS, Lex &
Brother
Purpose: up tension between Brother
& Seit / Show Lex likes Seit
Plot: Brother’s messenger delivers the
message that Brother wants to speak with Seit alone. Seit believes she can
change his mind – AESS does not want to let her go, but Lex sticks up for her.
He will accompany her – but Seit says no – wounding his pride – he lets her go
– then takes off without permission. He goes in with her into Brother’s tent –
set up in the middle of the battle ground. Brother tries to convince Seit that
she is greater than the AESS is allowing her to be. That she should be
worshipped alongside him. That they should be wed and mix the bloodlines for
the good of Egypt and their people. She tries to get him to stop this – to
bring good to the world with the magic they can unlock – but he gets angry –
Lex makes it worse – and the battle will occur.
Related to 29/31? 29=Seit and Lex
getting along / confidence / 31=War begins with Seit’s charge / Brother out
magics her
At stake? Friendship with Lex / Tie to
brother / her life
Conflict? Seit vs. Lex = she does not
want him to get hurt / Seit vs. Brother = will he listen to reason / Seit vs.
Self = can she start a war
Further the plot? Brother refuses to
back down / war is eminent
INT: Scene
31: Action
Setting: Battle in the Sands
Characters: Seit, Lex, AESS / ESS,
Parents, Uncle
Purpose: kill off characters / show
magic brother has
Plot: Seit leads the charge even
thought the AESS does not want her in battle. She goes for her brother and
wants to lay her parents and uncle to rest for good. Lex stays by her side.
Brother’s warriors are made of sand – and when they are struck the return to
the ground. Parents and Uncle stay by Brother’s side – they are strong and fast
– and kill without caring. Seit makes her way toward them. But as she is ready
to strike a killing blow to her father – Brother and her family disappear. brother’s jealousy of her mixed bloodline and takes Mindy to
become his bride so they will have children with similar lines
End book.
Related to 30? 30=Seit makes the choice
for the good of everyone
At stake? Dying / Lex’s life / Parents,
Uncle, & Mindy zombies / Losing
Conflict? Seit vs. Self = ready for
battle / Seit vs. Brother = in war / Seit vs. Zombie family members = can she
kill them?
Further the plot? Gets ready for the
next book / Brother disappears with his Zombies / others turn to sand / or
become captures if truly human
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